The poor only have themselves to blame for their own plight. (2S26)

Rich countries are also to blame for the plight of the poor because Multi-national corporations from these countries exploit the available resources such as cheap land and labour in developing nations. These large corporations pay workers extremely low wages. As a result, the money they bring home is insufficient to meet their basic needs. With the difficulty of having to make ends meet, it is highly unlikely that the children of these workers are able to receive a proper education. Hence, they are at the losing end as they have to take on odd jobs in order to supplement their parents' incomes. With no basic education, it will be difficult for them to get better paying jobs.They ultimately end up in the same plight as their parents and the family will remain in the vicious poverty cycle. Unless Multi-national corporations pay workers sufficient wages so they can provide more opportunities like basic education for their children and not focus solely on profit maximisation, poverty in developing nations will be here to stay. Therefore, rich nations are also to blame for the plight of the poor.


Any examples? You need examples to back up your arguments - otherwise, it's good.

The poor's(s) plight has been worsen(v) by rich nations(o). Transnational companies(s) from rich nations pay(v) low wages to the workers(o). This(s) causes(v) the poor(o) to not be able to purchase their basic needs such as food with their low purchasing power. The poor(s) is then trapped(v) in the vicious cycle of poverty(o) as they are not able to earn enough money to lead a comfortable life. This(s) will cause(v) children(o) from poor families to stop schooling and work to satisfy the household demand. This(s) causes(v) the population(o) to be less educated which will result in less opportunity to get higher paying jobs because of the lack in skills and education. If the transnational companies(s) were to pay(v) higher wages to the workers(o), they will then be able to lead a better standard of living and their children will be able to receive better education that can help them get higher paying jobs in the near future. Therefore, when transnational companies(s) exploit(v) poor nations(o) by paying low wages to the workers this causes the poor to remain at their current state of poverty.

Elise Aw

Elise this is definitely a big improvement ! Well done! - now you need to improve the paragraph by giving some examples!

Rich countries are also to blame for the plight of the poor countries because instead of using their financial and physical abilities to help the poor nations,they are actually exploiting the poor.Transnational and Multinational companies from rich nations pay the poor a very small sum of income for the services they provide.Moreover,rich countries also bribe the corrupt leaders of poor nations,giving them power to carry out this exploitation.This causes the poor to receive small amounts of wages which is not even sufficient for the purchase of their own basic needs such as food.Furthermore,the children in poor nations are not given the opportunity to receive education which prevents them to seek higher paying and better quality jobs.Thus,they do no have the ability to improve their standard of living which leaves them in the poverty cycle.

Dashing Nicholas Soh

Nicholas, this is better, you need to put examples now!

One of the main reason why the poor remain poor is because many a times, they are being let down by their own corrupt government which only cares abut filling their own pockets with money. This is why despite numerous foreign aid from richer nations, the situation of those living in poverty has not improved. Efforts made to alleviate their poverty are not reaching the poor themselves. The corrupt government running the country pockets foreign aid which could have been used to improve the country's infrastructure such as schools and better roads which could pave the way for development. Development would increase confidence of entrepreneurs in investing in these countries and such foreign investment is crucial in improving the economy in these countries and helping the poor leave the poverty cycle. However since the corrupted government would much rather use the foreign aid to increase their own wealth, the people are deprived of the money. Unless there is enough political will to usurp the incumbent government, the poor will continue to be poor while the corrupt government continue to line their pockets with foreign aid and become richer.

Wan Ling
Search the internet for some examples of corrupt leaders.

Rich nations are also to blame for the plight of the poor nations. This is because of the exploitation of resources from poor nations by rich nations. Multinational corporations are paying extremely low wages for labour in poor nations. As a result, families in poor nations are unable to satisfy their basic needs with the meagre amount of income that they earn. This forces young children to go out to work, hence they are unable to receive education, and potentially improve their situation by being more skillful and getting higher paying jobs. Therefore, they are unable to break out of the poverty cycle and this prevents them from improving their plight. Also, rich nations are bribing the corrupt governments of poor nations in order to
exploit resources. The profits generated by the corrupt governments are not channelled into the developing of the country, such as by improving sanitation or education. Without development, other nations will not invest in the poor nations due to the lack of confidence. Without investment, there will not be any economic growth and the poor nations will remain poor. Hence, because of exploitation by rich nations, poor nations are unable to improve their plight and are trapped in the vicious cycle.

Good. Now you need examples.

Rich countries are also to blame for the plight of the poor because they exploit the poor of their resources. Rich country like Britain would purchase the raw materials from the poor nations at the lowest cose possible and resell them at a high prices. The extra profits are not being passed on to the poor nations. In addition, multinational companies would pay very low wages for labour. The wages are so low that the poor are not able to break out of poverty as they are not able to satisfy their basic needs. Children would be forced to work in order to help the family and they will not be able to receive proper education and thus remain poor. Rich nations also bribe corrupt leaders and the money are not used for the development of better infrastructure and providing education opportunities. Without better facilities and infrastructures, it would not be able to attract more investors. This will cause the economy to be stagnant and causes poverty to worsen, and the poverty cycle continues.

Jenetta Soo

Jenetta, please check your work - too many grammar and spelling mistakes!

In face of global warming, global weather have become erratic due to drastic changes in average global temperatures. This has led to increasing occurrences of natural disasters such as floods occurring around the world. These natural disasters have caused serious damages to the infrastructures in the countries that they have struck. Resoucres that could have been planned to develop the economy would have to be diverted to repair these damaged infrastructures. People would also have to be evacuated because they have lost their homes and every possessions that they were not able to salvage to the floods. They could also become unemployed or suffer losses in their incomes in the case of farmers. In Queensland, Australia, the loss was estimated at A$13 billion. The estimated loss of Thailand is at Bt17 billion. Thailand's economy is not as strong as Australia and hence they are unable to cope with the huge losses which means that economic development of the country have to be put on hold so as to focus on repairing the damaged infrastructures. When there is no economic development, firms would not be motivated to set up business in the country and unemployment level will rise in the country. People would then be unable to raise their standard of living due to frequent disrputions to their lives and hence will not able to break out of poverty cycle.
Terence Liaw
Try to address the concept of blame in your paragraph. e.g Since nobody can predict or prevent a natural disaster, the poor in this case have no control, they are not to blame for Poverty caused by a natural disaster.

Rich nations are to blame for perpetuating the poverty cycle in poorer nations. Unfair trade practices by rich nations contribute to the poverty of poorer countries. Rich countries spend more on farm subsidies than Africa has for its entire GDP. Rich countries give heavy subsidies to their own farmers and in the process produce much more agricultural goods than needed at artificially low prices. This surplus of agricultural goods floods the world market and cause prices to fall. America's 25,000 cotton farms receive more than $3bn a year in support. The average European family pays more than $1,000 a year to the continent's richest farmers and agribusinesses under the Common Agricultural Policy. The International Cotton Advisory Committee claims these subsidies lower world prices by about 25 per cent. The farmers of poor developing countries, like in India, work hard with little to no government support. They are usually debt ridden because they are trying to compete with farmers from rich nations to sell their products and they produce much less than American food corporations, such as the Monsanto Company, a US based multinational agricultural biotechnology corporation which is the leading producer of genetically engineered seed. This is unfair for the poor nations, as their own farmers are incapable of competing in the global food market. Their inability to make any profits from selling their agricultural products prevents them from improving their standard of living and keeps them poor. Some rich countries have also been known to practice agricultural protectionism, locking out the exports from poorer countries. Subsidies, tariffs, and non-tariff barriers distort global prices and restrict access to rich-country markets. The global trading system discriminates against the world's poorest nations, making their products less competitive and undermining opportunities for growth, employment, and, ultimately, economic and social development in poor countries.

Robin Chia
Well written paragraph. Good example used. Well done.

Rich countries are to be blamed for the plight of the poor as they exploit their land. Many multinational companies from rich countries like America would buy land from poor countries at a low cost to use it to grow their crops and they would hire labour at very low wages. The crops would then be sold for a higher price compared to the cost they had to pay for the land and labour. The profits then go into their pockets, and a minimal amount goes towards the poor countries. This not only prevents these countries to develop further, like improving living conditions, due to insufficient funds, children as early as twelve-years-old are also required to help their parents work on the land, depriving them of an adequate education opportunity. This will force them to remain in the labour sector when they are older as little skills are being equipped onto the children, causing them to remain poor. This continues on and the poor countries will be trapped into the vicious cycle of poverty. Thus, due to the exploitation of the poor countries' land causing them to be in poverty, rich countries are to be blamed for the plight of the poor.

Nathanael Goh

Rich nations are also to blame for the plight of the poor nations because they exploit the poorer nations by paying them low wages in exchange for long hours of labourious work. Countryside citizens living in China seek employment opportunities in the city in hope for a job that is stable and provides them a reasonable income for the family. Transnational corporations, realising that the demand for employment in China is increasing, set-up industries in China targeted to provide jobs for these people. However, it has once been reported that these workers are poorly paid at a measly US$0.50 an hour, and this is barely sufficient for them to feed the mouths of his family assuming he is the sole breadwinner. There will thus be a lack of funds for investment in the children's education. This lack of education deprives them from taking up higher-paying jobs in the future which require the use of more sophisticated equipment and machinery such as computers. This implies a vicious cycle where the next few generations have only less skill-intensive jobs to choose from such as agriculture and farming, which do not offer a high income. Meanwhile, the rich gets richer through the exports of goods and services, bearing only a low cost of production. This allows the rich to enjoy high profits, at the expense of the poor. Therefore the income gap between the rich and the poor widens. This leaves the poor in vain hopes of alleviating the problem of poverty in their family. Hence the rich are also to blame for worsening the problem of poverty through exploitation. :)

Abel Tan
Logical, well elaborated paragraph. You just need to improve your grammar.

Rich nations are also to blame for the plight of the poor nations. This is due to the exploitative practice that the rich nations practices. Multinational companies (like?) owned by the rich countries will pay very low wages for the worker’s contribution. The low wages may even not be enough for their minimum necessities or to satisfy their greater wants. Hence, the poor would not be given a chance to make a breakthrough to their poverty cycle. Moreover, corrupt government such as the ones in Somalia may be easily bribed by the rich nations. Profits earned by the country would not be used for the development of the country, but instead used for their own selfish benefits. Government should be the leaders in the country and should responsible for ensuring the welfare of his people. But instead, they do not use money earned to set up better infrastructure to attract investors and to create more jobs for the people. This will ultimately led to fewer opportunities for the poor to break out of their poverty cycle. Hence, the poor will always remain as poor. Therefore, rich nation are also to be blame for the poor’s plight.

You are glossing over the part about the rich nations. You start off the essay discussing the rich nations but halfway through you move on to corrupt govts. This is untidy organisation.

Cheng Hui Ling

Rich countries are also to be blame for the plight of the poor because they indirectly cause it and they make it worse as they have the influence over their plight. They have the ability and they can choose to help to improve the plight of the poor. However, the rich countries exploit their resources by buying raw materials at low cost and sell the final product at high cost earning large profits. Multi-national companies also pay very low wages for labour. This causes the poor to be poor as this prevent the poor from becoming rich.(overly simplistic statement) The workers will not have enough money to satisfy their basic needs. Their children will have to start working at a young age, they would not have the money nor opportunity to receive education. Without proper education, they would not have the knowledge or skills to work better jobs to have higher wages. Thus, this caused their poverty to worsen and they are unable to break out of the poverty cycle.

Jasmine Lin

However, not all the blame is on poor countries themselves. Rich nations are also responsible for the plight of poor nations. Through corruption, exploitation and excessive privatization, rich countries often do not care about truly improving and helping their poor counterparts. Rich nations are often selfish and pretentious, only considering their own benefits. And when they actually do offer help, beneath the noble veil of “helping”, rich nations, in one way or the other, always stand to gain something or their “help” often comes with significant strings attached. The poor nations then emerge, still stranded helpless in their vicious cycle of poverty. Furthermore, due to the controversial nature of the issue, rich countries often do not openly acknowledge the true nature of their activities in poor nations, choosing to obscure the blame through plausible deniability. One excellent example is the horrific Chevron/Texaco exploitation in Ecuador. The Chevron/Texaco controversy is a classic case of a large powerful multinational company ruthlessly exploiting the helpless poor. Their sole concern was the profit they made from the oil refineries in Ecuador, and therefore relentlessly tore apart the natural resources of the land the indigenous people needed to survive. In their time there, Chevron/Texaco blatantly dumped 18 billions gallons of toxic waste and formation water, and 17 millions gallons of crude oil directly into the Amazonian streams, rivers and the jungle floor, from the mid-1960s to early 1900s. As a result, many locals’ newborns are born with serious birth defects, children die from drinking oil-polluted water, and the fortunate few who manage to survive to adulthood, are greeted with cancer, 18 being the most common age for a local to be diagnosed with a tumor. Additionally, the local workers are paid obscenely low wages for backbreaking work. The Ecuadorian government is well aware about Chevron/Texaco’s activities, but unsurprisingly, had no qualms about continuing the standard operating procedure installed by Chevron/Texaco, indicating the obvious presence of internal corruption. With such low wages, locals cannot afford education nor save enough to move their children to elsewhere with better standards of living. Without proper education, the poor indigenous people have no knowledge whatsoever on how to defend themselves against the powerful multinational company. Even then, with proper education, it is often a battle of David versus Goliath. The economy suffers with the low productivity caused by the poor health of its population. How can one expect the poor of Ecuador to even try to break out of the vicious cycle of poverty when they have no choice but to suffer such atrocities? In essence, the poor either dies, or remains poor, while the rich multinational firms and their respective home country prosper.

Kristopher Kow 2S26
Good, well elaborated example. I like how you make use of adjectives to strengthen your argument and show a personal voice. However you need to add a sentence which will point the blame at the rich nations.

Rich nations are also to blame for the plight of the poor, as the rich nations have the resources and capability to alleviate the poor from their situation, but instead, they choose to exploit the poor by paying them low wages for their hard labour. The low wages are sometimes insufficient to provide for their basic necessities, and as such, they lack the opportunity to seek an education and improve themselves. As a result, their children are also forced to work and miss out on fore-mentioned educational opportunities, and they lack knowledge and are unable to break out of the poverty cycle. While the poor remains stagnant, the rich are getting richer from the exploitation, by earning profits and developing their own countries, without offering much aid to the poor. Therefore, rich nations are also to blame for the plight of the poor.

Where are your examples?