Are the poor to blame for their own plight? (2S05)

One reason why the poor are suffering from their plight is due to the governments filled with greedy, power-hungry politicians. The corrupt officials do not allocate the resources into developmental projects and instead use it for their own selfish motives. They get involved in illegal activities such as embezzlement and bribery. With such incorrigible leadership, it’s rather difficult for the problem of poverty to be eradicated when the corrupt government have themselves to be part of the cause. (why? tell me how!) A study done by the Transparency International in India found that the corruption in India has lead to the slow economic growth in India from1944 to 2005. ( what does slow economic growth result in? You need to link this to the poor! ) This figure adds up to nearly 40% of India’s GDP growth. As a result, the poor remain poor or even worse off due to this lack of responsibility amongst officials. These funds could be used to improve the lives of the poor instead. [Gaithri]

Gaithri - you have not shown clearly how corrupt governments either a) cause the poor to be poor or, b) worsen their poverty or, c) prevent them from escaping poverty.

One factor that causes the plight of the poor is the income distribution between the rich nations and the poor nations. The rich nations have a higher standard of living as compared to the poor, hence, they have more purchasing power to take part in foreign investments as compared to the poor nations. Also, the people in rich nations have the financial means to equip themselves with more knowledge and skills. As a result, it is easier for the people in rich nation to secure jobs or even start their own businesses after earning enough capital. However, the people in poor nations as not as lucky, most of them are not able to afford education and usually end up with tiring and low-paying jobs. In this way, the rich will only get richer while the poor gets poorer, causing the rich nations to be trapped in this vicious cycle( Illogical! Missing link!). Thus, the poor is not to be blame for their own plight (why? You have not provided reasons) as the unequal income distribution plays a significant role in causing the plight of the poor. The rich nations should offer a helping hand to the poorer nations to improve their standard of living. ( YiRong, 2S05)

Coming from a poor family background, trapped in the vicious cycle of poverty, one does not have a say in whether they want to be poor. Being unable to break free of this vicious cycle, one just suffer the fate similar to their parents'.
This is not their fault as they were born this way and nothing they do could change this, ( sweeping statement!) hence they are not to be blamed for their own plight. However in cases where people are poor due to their laziness or reluctance to work, they
have only themselves to blame.As they are actually capable of earning an income but they do not wish to, hence they have to take responsibility for their actions. Therefore most of the time, poor are not to be blamed for their own plight due
to environmental factors, but in other cases they have to take responsibility. In the case of poor countries it is felt that it is appropriate that rich countries should help the poor countries but the form that this help should take should be aimed at (why? )
helping the receiving country to help itself in the long run and not becoming dependent on the generosity of others. ( Jun Tat)

You are not doing the paragraph right - each paragraph should focus on only one argument! Please compare your work with those of your friends.
Jun Tat, you need to practice writing with the SVOC structure I taught you. Take a look at the work of the Elise Aw's (from 2S26) paragraph. See how she makes it a point to use SVOC in her writing.

Rich countries are also to be blame for poverty as these rich countries exploit poorer countries for their cheap labour. Knowing that the poorer countries have an abundance of unskilled labour which makes the cost of labour cheap, big companies set up their factories in these countries and hire the people there to produce goods for them at low wages. The workers are paid so little that sometimes even the children and the elderly have to come out and work. This will result in the children losing the opportunity to have an education and the chances of them getting a well paid job in future are lowered. This will cause them to remain in the cycle of poverty. Nike sets up its factories in low labour cost countries like Africa to save on their cost of production. However this has not allowed the Africans to escape poverty but instead trapped them in the vicious cycle of poverty.(how? - please elaborate) This proves that the rich is also to be blame for poverty. Instead of helping the poor to get out of poverty, they are making it worse for them. (Samantha, 2S05)

Corrupt government may also be blamed for the poor's plight. When the government is corrupted,(corrupt!) I they would rather put the country's funds into their own pocket rather than using it for its original purpose - development of the country. The lack of development may be the reason of its citizens being poor. Generally developing countries has a large population and the absence of development would render thousands jobless. Without a stable income and the lack of skills, the citizens could only resort to agriculture to sustain their own living. In Africa where droughts are frequent, many would remain poor as they are unable to produce enough crops for profit. In addition, the corrupt government are most likely unwilling to invest in education (why?). Without proper education, the poor could not break away from the vicious cycle of being poor as they are lack of the skills that could enable them to earn a higher income.

Yue Wan

Rich countries are to be blamed for the plight of the poor people as they massively exploit and make use of cheap labour from the poor countries. Rich nations are rapidly developing everyday and require a large workforce. When they do not have enough labour for their productive capacity in their country, they would hire labour from the poor countries, paying them a relatively low amount of money for their service. This leaves the poor people in a dire state of poverty because the money they earn will still be insufficient to use for basic necessities in their home, leaving the poor in hardship. The most critical part
about this unfairness is that the poor have no choice but to work for the rich because of the lack of job opportunities in their own country. In order to earn a living, they are 'forced' to work in other areas. Futhermore, there is also a brain drain in the developing country as the smarter brains in the nation will leave the country for a better living in a developed country, making things worse because there are less smart brains to improve the developing country in terms of standard of living. The developing country thus have no economic growth and will stay in this poverty trap, while the rich nation continues to thrive and exploit labour, indirectly causing poverty.
Not a bad paragraph Linus. You have shown improvement from the diagnostic test. Provide some examples of countries which experience brain drain.

Rich countries have to accept partial responsibility for the poverty conditions faced by people in the underdeveloped countries. The former exploit the latter in terms of cheap labour and raw materials, which are underutilised in the poor countries. The rich make use of the poor to produce goods and compensate them with very low wages. Since the economies of these poor countries are on the downside, with high unemployment rates, the poor have no choice but to work for the rich. With little income, there is a higher tendency for the poor to remain trapped in the poverty cycle. The undervalued raw materials supplied to the developed countries lead to a vicious poverty cycle for the poor. Lands meant for agricultural purposes are destroyed in the process of mining. This translates to more money from the budget being pumped into land restoration projects, reducing the money available for infrastructure purposes within the country. The economy may remain stagnant, or worse, deterioate. The poor will face immense difficulty in breaking out from the relentless poverty cycle. (YenHuei)

Good points in this paragraph. You need to supply some examples to justify the points you have made. E.g some countries where farmers are displaced by mining companies. Countries where the poor are exploited by rich companies from developed countries.